In Social Studies we are practicing writing lawyer paragraphs.
This is my draft paragraph.
Iqbal’s relationship with his family was robbed from him. When he was very young he was forced into bonded labour. Iqbal was forced into labour at such a young age, that he did not even know how to read. He had to work long hours with little breaks. His education was robbed from him. Most importantly, his relationship with his family was severed when he was taken away from them. Iqbal never got to know his family because of bonded labour.
This is my final paragraph
Iqbal’s human rights were stolen from him. When Iqbal was very young he was forced into bonded labour. Today, more than two hundred million children between the ages of five and seventeen are "economically active" in the world. In fact, Iqbal was forced into labour at such a young age, that he did not even know how to read. He also had to work from dawn to dusk. Unfortunately, his education was robbed from him. Most importantly, his relationship with his family was severed when he was taken away from them. Because of this, Iqbal lost his human rights because of bonded labour.
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